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Post by JayVitolo on Oct 27, 2003 20:40:43 GMT -5
Okay...I know I said not to expect Chapter 3 until the weekend, but I got really bored today and was blessed with many ideas. So happy "what ever holiday is next in your country"...that may come off as ignorant, but the American calenders I get finally decided Kwanza was a holiday. Omega Web chapter 3 is up and ready for reviews. www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1558817&chapter=3 |
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Post by Ruby Trinity on Oct 27, 2003 21:22:19 GMT -5
Jesus Jay what do you do, speed type?? Not ready until next weekend *scoff*.
But seriously I read it Jay and I truly thought it was well written. Of course it was JMPR so you know that was enough to please me but you had some very good lines it there my favourite being:
-----"Hates happiness. Hates life." Angelo looks back at the picture and slides it to Sydney. "Hates joy."
"Why Angelo? Why does this man hate so much?"
Angelo grabs Sydney's sit coat and pulls him close. "Rage. Lust. Control." He grabs the pen from Sydney's breast pocket and grabs the picture from the floor. He begins to carve circles around Miss Parker. "Wants Miss Parker."-----
So now you have the third up... where's the fourth? I expect it in the next hour you know ;D. *chuckle* no pressure...
Ruby Trinity
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Post by JayVitolo on Oct 27, 2003 22:27:15 GMT -5
I've been writing this chapter for like a week and a half....I wanted to get everything to work out right. I was sitting on two pages for atleast 5 days...couldn't get a d**n thing to stick on the pages.  I really was going to wait since there were no ideas in my head...then I wanted Profiler today, saw how Jack of all trades acted, figured out how I'd write the stalker, and story was finished. (waves hands like a magician) ;D Now I will not make any promises on chapter 4...it may end Omege Web, it may not. Who knows....  |
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